The Test
“Wake
up your late for school!” shouted Courtney. I jumped out of bed, got dressed
and remembered that there was a test today.
Bing
Bing “Mom, I hear the bell I can’t eat breakfast I have to go, peace!” I got to
school, ran inside and asked, “ Am I late yet?”
“Not unless you run!” said the secretary. So as quick as I can I sprint down the hallway! However, I discovered that the test is after recess so I have a little bit of time. I gingerly studied my yellow textbook.
After the test Mr. Fitz said “You did remarkable, Congratulations!”
“Not unless you run!” said the secretary. So as quick as I can I sprint down the hallway! However, I discovered that the test is after recess so I have a little bit of time. I gingerly studied my yellow textbook.
After the test Mr. Fitz said “You did remarkable, Congratulations!”
Great story just when you say “Not unless you run!” said the secretary. So as quick as I can I sprint down the hallway! However, I discovered that the. you should have an indent
ReplyDeletegood job a couple of mistake but nothing to big
ReplyDeleteGreat story but when you wrote bing bing, I think you should change bing bing into ring, ring. But overall great story.
ReplyDeleteGreat story the only thing is that when you write, I discovered that the test is after recess, you should put was instead of is so it would read, I discovered that the test was after recess.
ReplyDeleteAlso, so I have a little bit of time, I think you should re-phrase it so it read, so I had a little extra time left.
But these are just my opinion!
I think you should use some complex words for ex. instead of jumped you could use leaped. overall amazing story
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