The Message
Greetings humans of earth my name
is RTD2. I am the leader of all Robots on planet 21. We are all in danger! Have you
heard of Davy Jones? He is trying to take over the Robots on planet 21. We have
something he wants. Unfortunately we can’t tell you what the problem is. But if you
Humans do help us we will give you lots of supplies. We can also help you teach in schools. We know many things about Science. We know how the world
started and we even know what is going to happen in 7 years! So please help us and we
will help you.
you put a capital T in teach
ReplyDeleteThanks Harry Potter I will change that!
DeleteOverall, you have a really good story. You just have some minor errors, you don't need to capitalize 'lots'. You forgot to indent the beginning of your paragraph and you also don't need to capitalize 'please'.
ReplyDeleteI will change that thanks Annabeth!
Deletenice story overall, but I think you should make this sentence: But if you Humans do help us we will give you Lots of supplies. Go like this: But if you Humans do help us, we will give you Lots of supplies. so just add a comma between us and we. thats just my input, overall nice story
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