Tuesday 29 November 2016

The Game

 The Game

         “Hurry up,” said Dave, “we have to find the stone!” Jack did not have much time for breakfast so he grabbed an orange.

 Then Jack said, “I’m coming,” and ran out the door.

 20minutes later.  “We’re here Jack,” said Dave.   Jack with fear and excitement said, “Let’s go find the stone!”  “Jack,” said Dave,” walk away, very slowly.”
  Jack was scared, he thought there was a crocodile behind him! But he was wrong, Dave was just scaring him. When he was walking away, he collapsed on a wide orange stone. Within the moment it took him to get up, Dave picked up the stone and won the game!

                                          

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2 comments:

  1. 100wcbyshady30 November 2016 at 12:58

    u need a space between 20 and minutes

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  2. Yahl PS7 December 2016 at 17:13

    hi Turtle,
    your story is great.
    you used the prompt which is good.
    you needed to make a space between 20 and minutes. But everything else was good.
    from Emily.
    ps if u want to comment on my blog just click on http://emily45yps.edublogs.org/ to comment on me.

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